“So I hired this brilliant homepage the other day…”

What is it that encourages buyers to pick a freelancer based on their website? Well, there’s the obvious triple whammy of clients, experience and findability.

But what about the humble About page?

Surely one of the most consistently neglected pages on the web.

For example, here at Scribblemill, the second most-viewed static page is About, beaten only by Home.

So my hunch is that nearly every serious buyer eventually clicks on About.

(On a side note: If you watch a film, do you often check IMDB to see the director’s previous work? Or go straight to the author bio before reading a book?)

I don’t mind telling you – all this attention on About makes me a tad nervous. After all, like most people, I hate writing about myself. I’d rather clean drains with my bare hands than write a CV. So I frequently wonder if I’m saying the right thing.

And, thinking of my clients, the About page is often far down their list of priorities. In some cases, that’s fair enough. (Who clicks on the About page for Tesco, for example?)

Yet for small businesses, personality and credibility is important. This goes double for freelancers. About is a chance to show your credentials and add some colour to the picture. A few things to remember:

People do business with people – not monitors.

The internet is still largely a faceless medium. The first chance a prospective client may have to get to know you (as an individual) is through the About page.

The homepage tells people what you do. About tells them who you are.

People aren’t looking to be ’sold’.

Of all static pages on your site, the About page should be least full of sales talk. (In fact no page should, but that’s another story.)

By all means point out your qualities. But do it simply, honestly, and without hype.

People don’t need to know the name of your cat.

How much information is too much? Really that’s a judgement call based on your site and your target clients. But I’d say it’s safer to focus on relevant info. A few mentions of your hobbies might be fine, but your favourite pizza topping probably isn’t.

(I happen to know a high-end development firm that refuses to have anything on their About page – other than a photo of their cuddly toy office mascot. I still question what they hope to achieve with that.)

Honestly, I recently chose to remove a few details that I felt were doing nothing but bogging down my about page. And it’s still a little me-centric, something that’s hard to avoid in this case. Let me know what you think (I can take it!)

Have a look at your About page. What does it say about you?

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How To Avoid Being Boring By ‘Submerging The I’

by admin on February 22, 2010

This man has read too many tech websites. (Image courtesy of Shreyans Bhansali.)

Let’s say you’re going to your friend Amanda’s house for dinner. Should be fun. “There will be a few other people there,” Amanda tells you.

Then you arrive and you’re stuck next to Brian, a management consultant and golf aficionado with a penchant for long, self-important stories. Nearly every sentence he utters starts with “I…

Does it feel like Brian gives a fig about what you’re up to? Does he bore you to the point of drowning yourself in the soup?

What if he’d started by asking about you instead?

What if he’d simply used the word “you” more often and dropped the I-centricity?

The writer Chuck Palahniuk (author of Fight Club and Choke, among others) has a term for this. He calls it “Submerging the I”.

Even when he’s telling a story in the first person, he uses “I” as little as possible. Palahniuk knows that self-absorbed people are only interesting to themselves.

Because what’s the subliminal message if you constantly use the word “I”?

You’re saying: “I’m not interested in you, I want to tell my story.

Round here, they call it “The Big I Am.”

Extrapolate that to a business and website copy environment and what message have you got?

“We don’t care about helping you, we’re only interested in ourselves.”

A dangerous message to put out, wouldn’t you say?

So, try not to let your website sound like Boring Brian. Focus on the you, and submerge the I and We as much as possible.

(P.S. You can check how me-centric you are using Futurenow’s customer focus calculator.)

So, I was training a group of web copywriters the other day, and casually mentioned features versus benefits. Nothing earth-shattering there.

But, just as I was about to click to the next slide, I noticed that the expected nods and hums of recognition didn’t arrive. So I asked, “you do know the difference between features and benefits, right?

Blank stares.

I realised that I often take it for granted that website writers know and understand what a benefit is. So here we go, features and benefits in a nutshell:

A feature is something the product does.
A benefit is how a feature improves the life of the customer.

So how about an example of features vs benefits?

Okay. I went to buy a saw at the weekend. Being something of a DIY illiterate, I was surprised to see a choice of about two-dozen saws.

I asked the bloke at the till what was my best option. His advice: “this one has tungsten tips, this one has a gel-embossed handle. This one here, the Sawmeister 3000, has a reinforced body.

He may as well have been speaking in Esperanto.

What he could have said is:

  • This one cuts fastest, because of its tungsten tips – so you’ll spend less time sawing.
  • This one is the most comfortable to hold – so you won’t get blisters.
  • This one won’t break, no matter how much you use it, so it’ll last longer and save you money.

After all, I wasn’t really buying a saw – I was buying quick, neat, cut wood. Just like people who buy 37Signals software are really buying an easier working life, people who buy a hedge-trimmer are really buying tidier hedges, or people who buy a Rolex are really purchasing perceived status.

The key, of course, is accurately pinpointing the true benefit to the customer. Even if this might not be clear at first, drill down until you find it. You can apply this to nearly anything (including aspects of your own life). For example:

Your social Life:

Feature: There’s a party this weekend
Benefit: You might meet that elusive dream girl who puts up with your accordion playing (not a true story)

Your education:

Feature: You get a load of letters to put on your CV
Benefit: You won’t have to work in the Burger King at Victoria Railway Station

Your web design business:

Feature: You design and build accessible websites
Benefit for clients: More customers will be able to use your site = more sales for you

Sometimes people mistakenly think that bringing out benefits means treating people like idiots. I disagree. It’s simply a way to spark in the customer’s mind how using a product/service will help them out.

Now, get sparking…

An Open Letter To Mr. $1.50 Article Writer

Dear Mr. $1.50 Article Writer,
How on earth do you do it?
It’s impressive – I have to hand it to you.
To have a head so crammed with knowledge that you need never spend time doing research. To have such a disciplined writing mind that you can structure and write an article, on any subject, in [...]

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“You don’t ask, you don’t get,” said Mahatma Gandhi. I’m no historian, but I’m pretty sure he wasn’t referring to cufflinks. Or, for that matter, copywriting.
Still, the bloke was on to something.
Yeah, yeah – the whole non-violence thing. Of course. But also the idea that asking the right questions is the only way [...]

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17 Free Tools To Improve Your Writing Online (And How to Use Them)

What should you pack into your web copywriter’s toolbox?
We’re not talking grammar guides and free-flow poetry here. These are web apps and software you can use to improve your web and SEO writing.
All have been useful to me over the years, though few are designed specifically for writers. Yet, if you use them in creative [...]

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Blogging (Or, Why I Took My Own Medicine)

Commence: Blogging.
So, I already blog.
I blog at other sites under my own name.
I business blog on behalf of a number of clients.
But it’s taken me a while to add a blog to the Scribblemill site. This is mainly down to time (a lack of it, thankfully, due to copywriting projects).
Now that the new [...]

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New Year, New Site…

Behold! The fresh new Scribblemill website.
Really, this has been long overdue.
While the previous version was pretty well-optimised and bringing in a fair amount of traffic (and leads), it was basically a static site. These days that’s like saying you still listen to cassette tapes.
Plus, as someone who is constantly advising clients on the [...]

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